Learning Outcome 1: Revision

 Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity, as well as editing and proofreading.

I always hated doing rough drafts in high school because they made us write down everything that we were gonna talk about, find quotes and that never worked for me. I always ended up adding to my paper going beyond the rough draft. Here that was encouraged. Knowing that I was encouraged to go beyond my draft and add new ideas really helped my writing process. Revision helped me find spots in my paper that were underdeveloped I terms of they say views. Being able to use old sources has helped me expand on my points while still giving evidence and understanding about my point. It also gives my personal experience more confidence and weight.

Body Paragraph from Essay 3 before revision

The same paragraph after adding in two different sources.

 As you can see, the paragraph before was mostly summary and personal experience with little reinforcement then I added sources which helped expand and strengthen my argument. Both Maria Konnikova and Zadie Smith talk about shared experience so I used shared experience as a bridge to bring the two sources together. With these two quotes I successfully made a compelling argument with what they say and what I say. I did not plan to use Konnikova when I was writing my rough draft, but being able to add content without limit has really helped me make connections between the text and what I believe, as well as between two different texts like I did above. I think being able to make that connection, not just in your mind but in your paper, and to transition between them is very important.